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could any English speaker help me to correct the grammar of my CV? thank you very much.?

AUTOBIOGRAPHY: After accumulating three years experiences on sales representative, I tend to change my career to marketing. This is because that marketing practices not only a simple sale activity but including multiple operations with advertising campaigns, the routes of display and surveys etc. It will be more challenging and interesting. I am willing to face and learn it. Since my wife and I finished master degree dissertations in England last month, we came back to Taiwan for job hunting. My dissertation named “Consumer’s attitude toward greener cars – a study of green marketing application”. The reason of choicing this topic is that I believe green issue should be considered to each business activity, although it is a heavy pollution industry. I read many articles about this issue and found some limitations of executing green marketing. The solutions could be that: communicating with customers through media or cooperating with government and NGOs to educate customers or ally with business partners/rivals to increase customer’s green consciousness etc. My dissertation is being examined now. I am likely to get the certification of master degree in January 2009. My short plan is to learn marketing practices in foreign company in three years. Then, I will do my best to with the balance between work responsibility and family life. The long term goal is to be a capable person who can shoulder more responsibilities in the company which I serve in. In the same time, I will try to commit the societal responsibilities in this stage of life. Serving for a firm which has same value not only can increase stability of work but also decline the friction of execution inside the company. As a result, a global company likes Johnson is an ideal one which can enjoy the work and making progress. Thus, I am willing to face any challenge at work and create more growth to company with colleagues if I have an opportunity to serve to you.

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1. That's now grammatically correct, good luck!! AUTOBIOGRAPHY: After accumulating three years experiences as a sales representative, I tend to change my career to marketing. This is because marketing practices are not only a simple sales activity but includes multiple operations with advertising campaigns, routes of display and surveys etc. It will be more challenging and interesting. I am willing to learn. Since my wife and I finished our master degree dissertations in England last month, we came back to Taiwan for job hunting. My dissertation is named “Consumer’s attitude toward greener cars – a study of green marketing application”. The reason I chose this topic is that I believe the green issue should be considered in each business activity, even if it is a heavy pollution industry. I read many articles about this issue and found some limitations for executing green marketing. The solutions could be communicating with customers through media or cooperating with government and NGOs to educate customers, or working with business partners/rivals to increase customers’ green consciousness etc. My dissertation is being examined now. I am likely to get my masters degree certificate in January 2009. My short plan is to learn marketing practices in a foreign company for three years. Then, I will do my best to find a balance between work responsibility and family life. The long term goal is to be a capable person who can shoulder more responsibilities in the company which I serve in. In the same time, I will try to commit to the societal responsibilities in this stage of my life. Serving for a firm which has similar values not only can increase the stability of work but also declines the friction of execution inside the company. As a result, a global company likes Johnson is an ideal one which can make the work enjoyable and create progress. Thus, I am willing to face any challenge at work and create more growth to company with colleagues if I have an opportunity to serve you.
2. After accumulating three years of experience as a sales representative, I have decided to change my career to marketing. This is because marketing as a practice is not only a simple sale activity but also includes multiple operations with advertising campaigns, the routes of display and surveys etc. It will be more challenging and interesting. I am willing to face and learn it. My dissertation is named “Consumer attitudes toward greener cars – a study of green marketing application”. The reason for choosing this topic is that I believe greener marketing should be considered for each business activity, although it is a heavy pollution industry. I have read many articles about this issue and found some limitations of executing green marketing. The solutions could be that: communicating with customers through media or cooperating with government and NGOs to educate customers or ally with business partners/rivals to increase customer’s green consciousness. My dissertation is being examined now. I am likely to get my Masters degree in January 2009. My short plan is to learn marketing practices in a foreign company within three years. I will then definitely do my best to balance work responsibilities with a family life. The long term goal is to be a capable person who can shoulder more responsibilities in the company I serve. In the same time, I will try to commit the societal responsibilities in this stage of life. Serving for a firm which holds the same values would not only can increase stability of work but also decline the friction of execution inside the company. As a result, a global company likes Johnson is an ideal one which can enjoy the work and make progress. Thus, I am willing to face any challenge at work and create growth and harmony if I get the opportunity to serve you. Please read it through. I've only posted the wrong sentences(and changed a few words which didnt seem right). Hope that helped! :-)
3. OK, not that it's my strong point but hopefully, this is a start for others to improve..... Following three years of experience as a sales representative, I concentrated on marketing. I regard marketing practices not only as a simple sales activity but as a complex operation involving advertising campaigns, surveys and constructing the marketing mix. I see it as more challenging and interesting and I am eager to learn. My wife and I returned to Taiwan last month to look for work, once we had completed our master degree dissertations in England. My dissertation entitled “Consumer’s attitude toward greener cars – a study of green marketing application” was chosen as I believe green issues should be considered in every business activity. I have read many articles about this issue and encountered some of the difficulties in producing effective green marketing. The solution I have identified is one of communicating with customers through the media or co-operating with government and NGOs to educate customers or ally with business partners/rivals to increase a customer’s green consciousness. My dissertation is being examined now and I expect to get the certification of masters degree in January 2009. My short plan is to learn marketing practices within a foreign company over the next three years. Then, I hope to find a position to enable me to find the correct work/family balance. The long term goal is to be a capable person who can shoulder more responsibilities in the company which I serve in. At the same time, I will try to meet the expectations of my family. I believe working for a firm which shares the same values as myself, not only increases the throughput of work but also reduces the frictions within the company. As a result, a global company like Johnson is an ideal one within which one can enjoy the work and make career progress. With this in mind, I am willing to face any challenge at work, contribute to building a successful team and a successful organisation.
4. I've corrected the grammar as best I can, but read it through and check to make sure it still says what you want it to, there were a couple places where I wasn't completely sure what you meant. I changed the order of a couple sentences, and I replaced the phrase "I am likely to get the certification of master degree in January 2009." with "I am expecting". If I were you, I would edit it, or choose one of the edited versions you get as an answer to your question, and post the new edited version as a new question, so that other people edit it. That way you can get more than one opinion. Also, I've edited for grammar, but I may have made a few spelling mistakes, and my spelling is a mix of American and British English. I don't know if it matters whether the spelling is American or British, but if it does, you should definately have someone check the spelling. After accumulating three years experiences as a sales representative, I'm looking to change my career to marketing. I think it will be more challanging and interesting, because marketing involves more than simple sales activities. Marketing involves multiple operations with advertising campaigns, the routes of display, surveys and so on. I am willing and prepared to face this challenge and learn. Since my wife and I finished master degree dissertations in England last month, we came back to Taiwan to find employment. My dissertation is called “Consumer’s attitude toward greener cars – a study of green marketing application”. I chose this topic because I believe green issues should be considered in all business activities, even in industries that pollute heavily. I read many articles about this issue and learned about some of the limitations of executing green marketing. The solutions could be, among other things, communicating with customers through media, cooperating with government and NGOs to educate customers, or allying with business partners/rivals to increase customer’s green consciousness. My dissertation is being examined now. I am expecting to get the certification of master degree in January 2009. My short term plan is to learn marketing practices in a foreign company for three years. Then, I will focus on doing my best to balance work responsibility and family life. My long term goal is to be a capable person who can shoulder more responsibilities in the company which I serve in. At the same time, I want to maintain a commitment to the societal responsibilities in this stage of life. Working for a firm which shares one's values can not only increase stability of work but also reduce difficulties within the company. As a result, a global company like Johnson is an ideal one for me, where I can enjoy the work and make progress. Thus, I am willing to face any challenge at work and create more growth for your company with my colleagues if I have an opportunity to serve to you.