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Is this an ok cover letter?

Name Address Telephone 13th February 2010 To Whom It May Concern Sanity Retail Personnel Manager ( i actually dont know about this, im just guessing, would that be right? because it doesnt say on the site) Address Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for a position of Casual Retail Staff member at Sanity. I would be well suited for this position as I find working with customers and different people exciting and rewarding. I am currently studying in Year 11 at Saint Ignatius' College. As you will see in my resume, I am able to read and speak different languages which help me to communicate with people from different backgrounds better. Furthermore, I am able to work with others of different ages, gender, race, religion and political beliefs. This was demonstrated when I began work experience, meeting the staff at Springbank Discount Pharmacy for the very first time. I have the ability to balance my work, home life and leisure activities, having enough time for each. This includes having the ability to work on weekends and during extended trading hours. I can use mathematics to solve problems individually and in groups. I have a range of basic IT skills to process my assignments and letters on, including software programs like Microsoft Word. In addition, I have great enthusiasm for ongoing learning and acknowledging the need to learn in order to accommodate change. I believe I am a candidate for a Casual Retail Staff member because of my skills stated above. I have the confidence and can offer dedication, enthusiasm and commitment during tough and difficult situations. I am willing to work for Sanity as it will help me to gain new skills and experience. In return, I can offer you great customer service assistance and help your company to continue being an organisation customers love to shop in. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to talking to you further and can be contacted after (time) on weekdays by phoning (number). Yours Sincerely, Name So, is that ok?? BTW they didnt advertised a position. On their website they just tell you how to apply, but i want to work as casual so is writing "Casual Retail Staff member" ok even though they didnt advertise it?? Thankyou so much guys!

Public Comments

1. i think that is more than adequate
2. Looks good. Well done. Most cover letters belong in the garbage. I note you refer to 'I am able to read and speak different languages', I would list these in the cover letter, so the reader doesn't have to find them in your resume. I would also break down the points you make in your main paragraph, and show them as dot points. These will be easier to read. Saying 'I believe' also weakens your argument or point, so you may want to rewrite that sentence. Good luck.