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Types of Eating Disorder An eating disorder is “a disorder characterized by abnormal eating behaviors and beliefs about eating, weight, and shape” (answers.com). Two types of eating disorders are over eating, and skipping meals. Both are dangerous and can lead to various health issues but both are treatable if they are caught on time. Overeating starts when someone is frequently teased about their weight. Overeating is when a person eats so much even if they are full, and after eating they feel guilty and depressed. Overeating mostly starts as a slight problem and can lead to a bigger one. Overeating can lead to obesity, or death, because most of the stuff they are eating isn’t all that healthy. In some cases the person can get choked by the food or even get a heart attack, because the body can’t digest so much food that fast. Sometimes when the person has episodes of overeating they force themselves to throw up, which is known as Bulimia. When you don’t eat well or you skip meals, the little you eat your body will storage it, instead of digesting it, because it knows that it will take a long time to get more food, and instead of losing weight you gain more. Of course if you stop eating completely, your stomach will get used to not receiving food and will throw out everything you put in to it. Skipping meals start when you think it’s the only way to lose weight, but the right way to lose weight is having a balanced diet. There are many Nutritionists that can help people make a healthy diet plan. When someone doesn’t eat at all, because they think they are fat, that can be characterized as Anorexia. Media and society The way of life of many people today may have a great effect on their personality and self-consciousness. In the American society, it is very demanding to have the perfect hourglass figure in order to “fit in”. Of course this fact influences many individuals to worry way too much about what they look from the outside and don’t care of the damage they are causing themselves on the inside. Media can cause people to become unhappy with their bodies, one because in most show the main actresses have always a perfect body, and because most of the larger sized actresses are always being made fun of. Which teen would rather be the larger sized actress than the perfectly shaped actress? People specially teens; don’t see that most celebrities aren’t perfect. In most magazines you see a famous person advertising a diet pill; and most people believe it actually works because they see that celebrity standing there. Most celebrities have cosmetic surgeries to look that perfect and regular people wouldn’t be able to afford that type of surgeries. Even if someone could afford a cosmetic surgery they are extremely dangerous. The effects of an eating disorder Both over eating and under eating because malnutrition and it’s when you don’t eat enough proteins and micronutrients witch include vitamin A, iodine and iron. Malnutrition can cause respiratory infections, kidney failure, blindness, heart attack, and death. Malnutrition can also be a case in people who look perfectly fine. Dehydration is caused when your body doesn’t have enough liquids in your body or carbohydrates and fat. Like I mentioned earlier, to maintain a healthy body you have to balance fats, carbohydrates, and proteins. Dehydration can also lead to kidney failure, heart failure, brain damage, and seizures. Another effect an eating disorder cause is Hyponatremia, which is when your blood doesn’t have enough sodium. Hyponatremia relates when you drink too much water and can have many effects on someone, especially if they are malnourished. Also when someone is malnourished your body starts feeding off of itself, which causes to lose muscle, this is called Muscle Atrophy (something-fishy.org). Some psychological problems are when you are always looking at yourself in the mirror but you don’t like what you see, which is when you have low self esteem. People become obsessed with the thought of wanting to be “perfect”. The picture that media gives us is that to be happy you have to be skinny, tall, and beautiful, which makes people’s self esteem go down. One of the causes of an eating disorder is depression, because when someone is depressed, they are unaware of what’s happening in their bodies. A lot of people during their depression they want to eat all the time, and others forget about everything they just want to rest, and most of the time they forget to eat or they just don’t feel like eating, and causes them to have health issues. Anorexia and Bulimia Anorexia and Bulimia both have a different meaning, they both start when a person doesn’t feel happy with their life. Some Anorexics or Bulimics hate their life/ and seek to control it through self-deprivation, or vomiting. “Anorexia is an eating disorder where people starve themselves” (Mamas Health). Anorexia is when a person doesn’t eat at all, and there stomach gets used t

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